English creative writing so confuse in help please?

Can some look over the assignment and tell what I did wrong and help me revise the assignment please so confuse help.





write a short summary before and after the characterization to contextualize it within a plot. In essence, you are showing the hero in your characterization and telling the story surrounding him or her in the short summaries before and after the characterization. An example is below, showing you how to accomplish this task. Write this assignment in either first or third person. While writing and revising, seek the most precise word choices possible to convey your imagined character. Remember to use concrete images whenever possible. Here is the example : The example below uses the desire of the character, as well as actions and images, to show him:





[Summary] William had convinced his mother to let him join the army, even though he was only 17. He had not been able to stand the loss of his grand piano that his father sold to raise money for another drinking binge. Now en route to Vietnam, William closed his eyes and drifted to sleep. His memories of music, lessons, and Professor Svoboda came to him in his dreams.





[Characterization] If only he could master that one last passage in Rachmaninoff鈥檚 second concerto, William was certain the piano competition would be his win. He carefully folded up his sheet music and placed it back in his portfolio. Professor Svoboda looked down and shook his head. If William would only realize his talent, he thought, he would know he鈥檚 ready.


William shook his instructor鈥檚 hand, as usual. He turned and left without a word. Glum. Again. He ducked under the tree branch hanging over the porch outside the studio door and swung his left hand in time to some inaudible bit of music in his head. Anger began to rise, hotter than the last time.


His quick pace and intermittent hand-swinging were familiar to the benchwarmers each weekday afternoon on East 73rd near the park. William saw nothing and kept his head down. But they saw him. They saw his photo on the kiosks in the park. Lincoln Center, no less. The international competition, February 16.


William turned right on East 65th and headed into Central Park. Another gray, damp afternoon, perfect for the last bit of Rachmaninoff鈥檚 weeping piano in the second concerto. William didn鈥檛 notice. His head was down.





[Summary] When the air transporter landed at the military base on Guam, William woke with a jolt. It was his 18th birthday. He would leave Vietnam a drug-addicted door gunner 13 months later.





This what I wrote for my assignment:


[Summary] My father convinced me that having an education is something that everyone needs in life. I had no idea that everything does not come easy for you unless you work hard for it.


[Characterization] My hero growing up as a child was no other than my father all my life before his passing. I came remember me and my dad talking what you want to do when you grow up go to college and make something out of myself that is a good little girl. I don鈥檛 want you to be anything like me not finishing school because school is the most important thing that you can have in your life education. I would come home everyday from school saying daddy I don鈥檛 think that I really want to go to college anymore because it is going to be hard work because I ask my teacher what she had to do to get were she at and she told me going to college got right were I really want to be a teacher wow. I ran home daddy I know what I want to do finish college and maybe one day own my own business.


My father was someone who you could have went to for advice or asks for anything because if he got it you know that you could have got it from him. I really didn鈥檛 know what I would do without him or his help. After my father death I really couldn鈥檛 focus on anything school or nothing. I really want to give it all up because my father is not here to share it with me and I remember what he said don鈥檛 be nothing like me just do what you need to finish school and opening up your business like you plan on doing because I am always going to be here with you.


[Summary] I couldn鈥檛 tell my father that I am almost finish because he die right because I finish high school so my goal was because he push me to my hardest to do my best and don鈥檛 give up at all.English creative writing so confuse in help please?
isn't william's father an alcoholic? is so how is he William's ';idol';?


you have some grammatical errors too, so read over it again.