Thoughts on these lyrics?

I wrote these just on a whim and i wonder what you think





Don't Leave Me Be





v.1


You鈥檝e got a thunder in your heart


But blood on your hands


Your family鈥檚 disowned you


And so have your friends


The situation鈥檚 looking bleak to me


As we live day by day





And I must confess


I thought of leaving your side


I was toying with sanity


I was ruining my pride


Then you turned to me and you said


Please don鈥檛 leave me be





Chorus


You said


Don鈥檛 you leave me


I need you right now


To show me how it feels


To be free


From the limelight


From this daylight


From these thoughts haunting me





v.2


We move west in the night


And hide out in the day


We joke together


Despite where we lay


We鈥檝e got everything to lose my dear


And we鈥檒l never be the same





I鈥檝e got red polish on my nails


Such perfect irony


A perfect colour


To describe what鈥檚 happening to me


Doubt in my left hand


And courage in my right





Which one is right?





Chorus





Bridge


They line the roads


They know where you live


They鈥檝e taken apart everything


Found the things you were addicted to


They think they know


Where you are now


but what they don鈥檛 know is


They are so wrong


And we鈥檙e not that far away





V.3


So we carry on


On the road


In this scrap metal


That miraculously can take all this load


We鈥檒l keep on going


Till they lose their minds


And We鈥檙e not far behind





We鈥檙e not far behind


Blood on your hands tonight


We鈥檙e on the run tonight.


On the run tonightThoughts on these lyrics?
finallllllllyyy!!!!


someone who writes well!


most of the people who post lyrics are so simplistic and so plain.


these lyrics are really good, i would listen to them.


:DThoughts on these lyrics?
I think it's great, you got potential :D
I love some of the lines in this. I would make it more of a broad subject though. Just kind of mentally zoom out and look at the general situation as a whole. This will help more people identify with the problem. It was good though. Good luck!
o my gosh!!!! those lyrics a AMAZING! I bet they would be even better once i knew what the melody was!
the song is very good its different from the other songs that are out there and thats good everything is the same now i like it.
beautiful lyrics, it flows well, i can tell the meaning, beautiful just beautiful
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